So... where is the conflict? Where are the obstacles? Where is the tension? & also, how does the fact that boy is a highly-intelligent/talented proactively change/impact on anything here in terms of your story? Feels to me that your circling a 'mood' here - a sort of wholesome sweetness - it's not that I don't like that mood, it just seems to be very strong in all your stories and maybe it's keeping you in a bit of narrative corner. The magnifying glass too is just sort of working like a magic door or wand (except in the first story where it creates more information and incites some action). My instinct is you should change everything up again... you need some conflict - consider pitting two child prodigies against each other, for example...
So... where is the conflict? Where are the obstacles? Where is the tension? & also, how does the fact that boy is a highly-intelligent/talented proactively change/impact on anything here in terms of your story? Feels to me that your circling a 'mood' here - a sort of wholesome sweetness - it's not that I don't like that mood, it just seems to be very strong in all your stories and maybe it's keeping you in a bit of narrative corner. The magnifying glass too is just sort of working like a magic door or wand (except in the first story where it creates more information and incites some action). My instinct is you should change everything up again... you need some conflict - consider pitting two child prodigies against each other, for example...
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